...and
if I lied
and said
I felt fine
would you see
the convenience
of a disguised truth
leaking out the corner of my eyes
marveling...
...as it meanders
...as it evolves
...as it erodes a gorge into the emptiness of me.
Pity…
…that sorrow bathes
in the comfort
of barren days
and a tattered past
and a bullet riddled present
and a cellophane future
and a juxtaposed prose that is easily disposed
in the shadow of unsubstantial twilight
as
love
splendor
sex
&
death
perform
in a unheralded
quartet
which echoes thru the halls
of a Sistine dimension
tucked neatly
under the arm
of ignorance
pieces of flesh
and compassion
dangling
greedily
plucked upon
by scavengers born
of one-night stands
and tryst unplanned
who with starving thirst
partake of a poison
concocted with solitude
and dust from renaissance's marrow.
The taste of it soothes like a genocide and vodka chaser...
...served from a chilled glass forged in a kiln of pain.
© 2010 dasuntoucha
Your words are art.
ReplyDeletesuper fine tuned piece.
ReplyDeleteyour creativity is infinite.
well penned.
the metaphor is breathe taking!
Thanks for sharing such a divine piece with poets rally.
Cheers.
have fun!
Marvelous.. simply awesome.. artistic at its best...wonderfully woven thoughts..
ReplyDeleteamazing
Regards~ Sayandeep
wonderful imagery.. just awesome.. :)
ReplyDeleteVery creative, enjoyed the words!
ReplyDeleteThis is pretty incredible and I'm quite jealous of the line "soothes like a genocide". Genius.
ReplyDeleteWow, what an awesome poem. Really loved this part:
ReplyDelete"Pity…
…that sorrow bathes
in the comfort
of barren days"
You are very talented!
One word...Wow!
ReplyDeleteThis is simply an astounding poem..it grabbed me from the first word and carried me along on its passionate journey! So many wonderful images and emotions worked into those carefully-chosen words...I loved it!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful words...
ReplyDeleteI love the way you started the poem...
I loved reading it :)
Great creation.
ReplyDeleteLoved reading it.
I think the first part itself takes one to different levels! :) I think the first comment here says it all. Your poem is definitely an Art.!
ReplyDeleteHere is my Rally Poem
It sang itself :) great
ReplyDeleteBeautiful expression and depth.
ReplyDeleteAnita.
It's so sad and beautiful at the same time. Your poetry is art. It's gorgeous and thought provoking.
ReplyDeleteYou made beautiful art with your clever words!
ReplyDeleteAll the best
Marinela x
Wow, this blew me away! The word play was amazing.
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love the way u started it and the way u ended it..
ReplyDeletedifferent and to the point poem :)
pain, and it's bedfellow, suffering... wonderful poem, that draws you in and doesn't let you go 'til the end. Then you can draw a breath!!
ReplyDeletethank you for dropping by, and the 'white stuff' is still laying, although I hope today will bring a thawing, 'tis lovely at first, but does linger too, too,long!! lol!!
xPenx
Powerful depths in your imagery here, amazing metaphor. Wonderful write.
ReplyDeleteThanks for stopping by mine and following along.
http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.wordpress.com/2010/12/08/thursday-poets-rally-week-34-participation-awards/
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Happy Thursday!
Beautiful. This touched me deeply.
ReplyDeleteAmazing imagery.
ReplyDelete...the convenience
ReplyDeleteof a disguised truth...
-and that-
...unheralded
quartet
which echoes thru the halls
of a Sistine dimension...
your imagery fans smoldering embers
taking me places
i might not have chosen to go
muse, indeed
...
http://seizingserenity.blogspot.com/2010/12/honeysuckle-hyperbole.html