The Italian Sonnet has fourteen lines that break up into two quatrains, which usually describe a problem, followed by a sestet (two tercets), which gives the resolution to it. This type of Sonnet can have many rhyme patterns but the one I will be using today is:
abba abba cddc ee
The Shakespearian Sonnet (made famous by you know who) consists of three quatrains and a couplet. Like the Italian Sonnet, it tends to describe a problem and offer a resolution. The rhyme pattern I’ll be using for this one is:
abab cdcd efef gg
I like Sonnets because they tend to be breaths of brevity…but the challenge is sticking to the script of iambic pentameter…that 10 syllable count is a pain in the bahookey…that’s why there’s poetic license. (^_^)
Italian Sonnet
Wistful Thinking
I dream of her draped in a cool breeze,
sprawled out on the mosaic of my mind,
scantily clad, a vision so sublime
her beauty could bring desire to its knees.
Curvature inspiring eyes to freeze
on this Syrian ancestral find,
derrière so decadently divine,
from which passion prohibits a reprieve.
But lusting after a goddess isn’t smart,
when the soul is etched with fervor’s treads,
life as I know it lessened to shreds,
my heart, a piece of her unfinished art.
Undone by this subconscious endeavor
I’ll avert my gaze from her forever.
© 2010 dasuntoucha
Shakespearian Sonnet
Monotonous Motions
Can one stay calm while driving to work?
congested roadways make the nerves tense,
especially when you’re cut off by a jerk,
whose actions cause facilities to wince.
Violence immediately fills the head,
thoughts on the days chores done,
the main focus is to see that motorist dead.
Road rage has sprung, so I reach for my gun,
is today the day I make the evening news?
Shots fired, we’re live on the scene,
because some idiot has magnified rush hour blues,
destroying a disposition that was once serene.
To expel this insanity from my brain,
I think I’ll start to commute by train.
© 2010 dasuntoucha
I am currently trying to try new forms of poetry. i am now writing a sonnet ( at least it looks like one). this was of great help. thank you.
ReplyDelete"But lusting after a goddess isn’t smart,
ReplyDeletewhen the soul is etched with fervor’s treads,
life as I know it lessened to shreds,
my heart, a piece of her unfinished art."
...that unfinished art echoes...and leaves me with a sense of longing...potent imagery!
The road rage sonnet is very original and highly entertaining.
Nicely penned sonnets! I know they are not an easy form to write correctly and I certainly appreciate when I see them done this beautifully!
ReplyDeletePamela
To expel this insanity from my brain,
ReplyDeleteI think I’ll start to commute by train.
enjoy your train ride,
very lovely sonnet.
Thanks for sharing!
dasuntoucha I know I am here again, but I couldn't resist. I love the Italian sonnet.
ReplyDeletePamela
Loved your poems...making me to try a sonnet:)
ReplyDeleteWonderfully written work! =)
ReplyDelete-Weasel
Wow, very well executed sonnets. A difficult form, you wrote them well.
ReplyDeleteVery well done on both of them - they are one of my favorite forms though I do not write them...love the rhythm of each....thank you..bkm
ReplyDeleteOf course reading them, makes them seem easy! I've had the title for a "sonnet" in mind for months and can't get there. It was a pleasure to read two very different versions here. Both with very different emotions. I must confess to admiring the black humour of the second more.
ReplyDeleteI'm having a hard time looking for sonnets these days, now I have found some and the author is still alive..a bonus :)
ReplyDeleteSonnet-My favorite form and as much as I want to make more of them, the tight parameters sometimes will just make you stop doing one.
You have a new avid follower in me now.