I like the words here a lot. I love haiku and I especially love haiku that don't necessarily deal with the beauty of nature but rather modern life and its realities, too.The only thing is that I don't know about how I feel about the placement of the words. It's almost perfect, but the top line is a little hard to read. Hmmn...
Hey Katie...Thanks for stopping by...I really appreciate your feedback (^_^). My one friend Tonya whose a haiku snob is always quick to inform my that if is not about nature then it's a senryu...she's a decent poet but a pain in the arse when it comes to haiku & senryu......as for the first line I had a formatting issue and I was too sleepy to resolve it last night...but I'll see what I can do...dig your blog...your writing is very genuine...ONE::
I love this. It's beautiful. Really great!
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I'm sorry about that...I just wanted to thank you for visiting The Inferno :) (Are you considering submitting? We'd definitely be honored!)I really like this, too, a very raw statement you make...it's like the image is speaking which is definitely more powerful, I think.
this picture remind me of the poor neglected homeless guys i see in NYC subways on my way to school. it always "hits" me in my heart to see people completely out-casted by society as if they were untouchable.yes indeed we need a awakening.Mory
thanks for commenting on my blog... for one reason alone... because it helped me bring myself here... i thoroughly enjoyed reading every word... my mind twisted and turned, was coaxed and cajoled, challenged and entertained ... as it followed the trails and tracks which these words of yours made... loved every moment.