I really like the rhythm on this one... I feel like I could almost hear you reading it out loud, slam-like. Really lovely imagery.
Well done! I've been enjoying reading your poems.
true, dreams could fade in front of our eyes.super lovely piece.the image on top is very powerful.. Here is one of my entries, an award is attached, thanks for the support.http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.wordpress.com/2010/11/08/my-sister-lives-too-far-away/
I love this piece... yet still fairy tales live on, though they can fade with time to a slightly less colorful version.
hmmm- short and neat- well phrased..
short but beautifully written...the photo is like a fantasy island...:-)almost paradise!!!
very neat, I loved the idea you put across here! Great selection of words.http://jessicasjapes.wordpress.com/2010/11/08/my-fortress/
How true... even the most well built can erode, right in front of our eyes.. that is times erosion wheel.. I liked it so much.. thanksॐ नमः शिवायOm Namah ShivayaTwitter: @VerseEveryDayBlog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com
lovely fairy tale...nice image
I very much like your take on it.
Great perception of how quickly dreams can fade away.
nice piece. loved the lines - fairytale facade - playful and fun. excellent job!
This was racy and fascinating... It really a facade indeed! They make you imagine the best, and then they just evaporate...leaving behind a parched soul!Oh... this is a beautiful poem, Dasun... I enjoyed the directness of it!!!
wow!!What an ethereal kind- touch and go- left with only dreams and imaginations alone..DasD, well done.. :)Love xx
Glad to visit you today againWe treasure your input at our group poetry efforts and would be thrilled to see you again this coming Monday.Any poem is acceptable, simply share and enjoy...Keep writing, Keep inspiring!xoxox