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Friday, December 3, 2010

Pathological Interment


...and
if I lied
and said
I felt fine
would you see
the convenience
of a disguised truth
leaking out the corner of my eyes

marveling...

...as it meanders

...as it evolves

...as it erodes a gorge into the emptiness of me.

Pity…

…that sorrow bathes
in the comfort
of barren days

and a tattered past

and a bullet riddled present

and a cellophane future

and a juxtaposed prose that is easily disposed

in the shadow of unsubstantial twilight

as

love

splendor

sex

&

death

perform
in a unheralded
quartet
which echoes thru the halls
of a Sistine dimension 

tucked neatly
under the arm
of ignorance
pieces of flesh
and compassion
dangling

greedily
plucked upon
by scavengers born
of one-night stands
and tryst unplanned
who with starving thirst
partake of a poison
concocted with solitude
and dust from renaissance's marrow.

The taste of it soothes like a genocide and vodka chaser...

...served from a chilled glass forged in a kiln of pain.




© 2010 dasuntoucha

27 comments:

  1. super fine tuned piece.
    your creativity is infinite.
    well penned.

    the metaphor is breathe taking!
    Thanks for sharing such a divine piece with poets rally.
    Cheers.
    have fun!

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  2. Marvelous.. simply awesome.. artistic at its best...wonderfully woven thoughts..
    amazing

    Regards~ Sayandeep

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  3. wonderful imagery.. just awesome.. :)

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  4. Greetings! How r u?

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    Write a poem fitting our week 13 theme (Dreams, Visions, Reveries), post it, and link in to our potluck, you are also allowed to link in unrelated poems. we are open Sunday, 8pm, American central time.

    We have had so much fun having you last week. I cannot wait seeing you on coming Monday again.

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    Have A Weekend As Graceful As Your Writing!

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  5. This is pretty incredible and I'm quite jealous of the line "soothes like a genocide". Genius.

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  6. Wow, what an awesome poem. Really loved this part:

    "Pity…

    …that sorrow bathes
    in the comfort
    of barren days"

    You are very talented!

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  7. Very beautiful imagination..
    Take a look on my poetry..
    http://ashbeezone.wordpress.com/2010/11/25/depths-of-my-heart

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  8. This is simply an astounding poem..it grabbed me from the first word and carried me along on its passionate journey! So many wonderful images and emotions worked into those carefully-chosen words...I loved it!

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  9. Beautiful words...
    I love the way you started the poem...
    I loved reading it :)

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  10. I think the first part itself takes one to different levels! :) I think the first comment here says it all. Your poem is definitely an Art.!

    Here is my Rally Poem

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  11. Beautiful expression and depth.

    Anita.

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  12. It's so sad and beautiful at the same time. Your poetry is art. It's gorgeous and thought provoking.

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  13. You made beautiful art with your clever words!
    All the best
    Marinela x

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  14. Wow, this blew me away! The word play was amazing.

    http://chickunderconstruction.wordpress.com/2010/11/21/sunday-morning/

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  15. love the way u started it and the way u ended it..

    different and to the point poem :)

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  16. pain, and it's bedfellow, suffering... wonderful poem, that draws you in and doesn't let you go 'til the end. Then you can draw a breath!!
    thank you for dropping by, and the 'white stuff' is still laying, although I hope today will bring a thawing, 'tis lovely at first, but does linger too, too,long!! lol!!
    xPenx

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  17. Powerful depths in your imagery here, amazing metaphor. Wonderful write.

    Thanks for stopping by mine and following along.

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    awards for rally week 34 posted, enjoy!
    Happy Thursday!

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  19. Beautiful. This touched me deeply.

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    welcome voting,
    you are nominated, you win one vote,
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    Good Luck!
    Happy Wednesday!

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  21. ...the convenience
    of a disguised truth...

    -and that-

    ...unheralded
    quartet
    which echoes thru the halls
    of a Sistine dimension...

    your imagery fans smoldering embers
    taking me places
    i might not have chosen to go

    muse, indeed

    ...

    http://seizingserenity.blogspot.com/2010/12/honeysuckle-hyperbole.html

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