The last line is very powerful. Nice word play.
salvation rides shotgunwith sacrilegeNice. I liked the 3-ring circus as a venue for the particular brand of fear you write of, quite effective.
The last stanza is brutally frank....The truth is often painful. A hard hitting piece but never a dull read.
I like the circus metaphor, and what's happening 'in tents' :O)
You're an amazing poet. All of your poems are so thought provoking and full of feelings that are very relatable. That picture is amazing as well!
I also like "salvation rides shotgun with sacrilege" very much. Like the poem and its intensity within the big top setting. Elizabeth
That was powerful. Gave me the creeps. Take that as a compliment. I think you are very creative.
I am inspired by your poetry. It is deep and meaningful, very powerful use of words to draw in the reader. ImpressiveWysteria
Dear Dasuntoucha...Very well done. I have enjoyed your words in past and this one is good too... thanks for sharing...ॐ नमः शिवाय Om Namah Shivaya Twitter: @VerseEveryDay Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com
What a strong poem! I had to rush through this, breathless!!
very powerful and creepy,tiptoe work on a wire,wow, that is breath taking line....thanks for sharing,Happy Belated Halloween,Happy November.
this is an fantabulous piece...it's very dark and appropriate for halloween...that last line is a killer...thanks for sharing!http://peachpitproduction.wordpress.com/2010/11/01/hallows-eve/
Great word usage and flow!
Love the layout and the ending - my type of poem!!http://jessicasjapes.wordpress.com/2010/11/01/halloween-fright/
Life is a freak show/circus/ brilliant my friend, brilliant!
Nice Potluck entry/
short sharp shock .... nice nice nicecheers!!!here is mine for pot luck its a softie compared to urs :)http://wiserskydiver.wordpress.com/2010/11/01/tricky-treat/
This is a powerful, creative poem. I enjoy your presentation as well as your words.Victoriahttp://liv2write2day.wordpress.com/2010/11/01/jingles-poetry-potluck-all-hallows-eve/
Very cool. I love how you work in the circus theme. It makes the message all that more powerful.
imagery is amazing, deep, well done.
Abstract emotions take concrete shape in your verse. Superb.
A wonderfully eerie poem, crafted to strike fear into the heart...well done!
http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.wordpress.com/2010/11/02/the-celebrate-poet-of-september-awards-officially-won-via-votes/the celebrate poet of September award for you,plus the honorable mention,Enjoy!u rock!
Well Done, love the idea of the circus, performing and fear~ Brilliantly interwoven!!!
Please help giving (belated) birthday wishes to 3 or 4 fellow poets:http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/11/03/happy-birthday-eric-dom/Thanks a lot for the support.Happy November!Your presence adds light to our space, keep shining!xxx
Ah...I do believe this is my favorite poem out of all the wonderful poetry you create!I'm almost jealous...; )
Very powerful words, laden with a fear for the future, as the ending suggests!Excellent poetry prompt.Eileen
OMG...This was scary and spooky.......grooooooooooowl.. I do that to keep up my courage and not really scare anyone.. hahaVery well composed.. I like how you have made it run on trickling......Poof!! I go to the next entry now..Wnat to know more..? Here- https://oliviasbiopiclog.wordpress.com/2010/10/26/trick-or-treat/
oh so very beautiful. You always blow me away.
http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/11/03/thursday-poets-rally-week-32-november-4-10/how r u?Letting you know Poets Rally week 32 is on,Drop me your entry if you wish to be part of it.Thanks a lot,Happy November!xxx
http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/11/06/mondays-child-the-smell-of-life/will give you the perfect poet award on week 33,I nominated you.cheers.xxx
THIS IS SO APPEALING! METAPHOR IN SUPERB USAGE. WOAH,I GIVE IT ALL.
What a powerful poem and what a true one. Striking visually.I enjoyed it a lot. Thank you.Hope you had fun with Potluck.
Powerful, so powerful I hurt inside...I have a thing about mirrors always have... something evil somewhere lurks!! (imagination maybe!!) xPenx