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Words by dasuntoucha © 2010
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The last line is very powerful. Nice word play.
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Nice. I liked the 3-ring circus as a venue for the particular brand of fear you write of, quite effective.
The last stanza is brutally frank....The truth is often painful. A hard hitting piece but never a dull read.
ReplyDeleteI like the circus metaphor, and what's happening 'in tents' :O)
ReplyDeleteYou're an amazing poet. All of your poems are so thought provoking and full of feelings that are very relatable. That picture is amazing as well!
ReplyDeleteI also like "salvation rides shotgun with sacrilege" very much. Like the poem and its intensity within the big top setting.
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That was powerful. Gave me the creeps. Take that as a compliment. I think you are very creative.
ReplyDeleteI am inspired by your poetry. It is deep and meaningful, very powerful use of words to draw in the reader. Impressive
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Dear Dasuntoucha...
ReplyDeleteVery well done. I have enjoyed your words in past and this one is good too... thanks for sharing...
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
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What a strong poem! I had to rush through this, breathless!!
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wow, that is breath taking line....
thanks for sharing,
Happy Belated Halloween,
Happy November.
this is an fantabulous piece...it's very dark and appropriate for halloween...that last line is a killer...thanks for sharing!
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wow!
ReplyDeleteGreat word usage and flow!
ReplyDeleteLove the layout and the ending - my type of poem!!
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Life is a freak show/circus/ brilliant my friend, brilliant!
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ReplyDeleteshort sharp shock .... nice nice nice
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here is mine for pot luck its a softie compared to urs :)
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This is a powerful, creative poem. I enjoy your presentation as well as your words.
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Very cool. I love how you work in the circus theme. It makes the message all that more powerful.
ReplyDeleteimagery is amazing, deep, well done.
ReplyDeleteAbstract emotions take concrete shape in your verse. Superb.
ReplyDeleteA wonderfully eerie poem, crafted to strike fear into the heart...well done!
ReplyDeleteWell Done, love the idea of the circus, performing and fear~ Brilliantly interwoven!!!
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Thanks a lot for the support.
Happy November!
Your presence adds light to our space, keep shining!
xxx
Ah...I do believe this is my favorite poem out of all the wonderful poetry you create!
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Very powerful words, laden with a fear for the future, as the ending suggests!
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Eileen
OMG...
ReplyDeleteThis was scary and spooky.......grooooooooooowl.. I do that to keep up my courage and not really scare anyone.. haha
Very well composed.. I like how you have made it run on trickling......
Poof!! I go to the next entry now..
Wnat to know more..? Here- https://oliviasbiopiclog.wordpress.com/2010/10/26/trick-or-treat/
oh so very beautiful. You always blow me away.
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Letting you know Poets Rally week 32 is on,
Drop me your entry if you wish to be part of it.
Thanks a lot,
Happy November!
xxx
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ReplyDeletewill give you the perfect poet award on week 33,
I nominated you.
cheers.
xxx
THIS IS SO APPEALING! METAPHOR IN SUPERB USAGE. WOAH,I GIVE IT ALL.
ReplyDeleteWhat a powerful poem and what a true one. Striking visually.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed it a lot. Thank you.
Hope you had fun with Potluck.
Powerful, so powerful I hurt inside...
ReplyDeleteI have a thing about mirrors always have... something evil somewhere lurks!! (imagination maybe!!) xPenx