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Sunday, November 14, 2010

Devoted Agony



28 comments:

  1. Awesome my Dear.
    I would love to sequal this

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  2. Wow...much said here and that measure of infatuation with someone...believe most have felt it with someone, somewhere in life...it is agony indeed..bkm

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  3. Ooh, this is so full of emotion. The wanting of someone that is just out of reach. Nice.
    Pamela

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  4. you are a very versatile word player- greaT!

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  5. There's s lot to be said for things being all in the mind! LOL :)

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  6. wow, this is too intense! being in love with a good friend is sweet agony indeed. maybe it's time to tell. ;)

    Bye For Now

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  7. Amazing! Falling in love/lust with a friend is tough! This describes it really well......love it!

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  8. I love this .. the last stanza didn't quite flow as well as the others, but this is very creative, even if these old eyes had a hard time reading the font ... still it was a deep and insightful piece, and I know this place!

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  9. lovely piece,
    you hold back, you love, and your mind dance on the blade of sin...

    brilliant words...
    a magnificent piece in portraying forbidden love.
    Thanks for sharing with potluck poetry.
    Happy Monday.

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  10. very identifiable topic to so many and feelings so well described..great write

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  11. Wonderfully written. If you get up the courage to confess, write another poem and let us know how it goes:)

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  12. A slick write, to give a darkness to what some would wish delight!

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  13. Intense and full of passion! What a muse...

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  14. I wrote a comment and it was deleted by accident...
    Long story short

    I dig your words...I've said it so many times...and I will keep saying it.
    Man, I love this!

    You perform?

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  15. great poem on desire. good use of language. nice job!

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  16. Almost brought me to tears, especially the second-to-last stanza.
    It's the casual touches which mean nothing to one and everything to the other that's heartbreaking.

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  17. I liked this so much.. thanks for sharing...

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
    Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com

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  18. I love how you have expressed ones secret desires of a friend.

    Anita.

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  19. What a rhythmic composition.. I almost sang it to myself.. This can very well be converted to a song with the same words.. The power of this composition filled me up.. :)

    Love xx

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  20. Simply phrased and nicely summed up; a contorted pleasure/pain is so hard to resist...Enjoyed it very much.

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  21. Great work... Thanks for sharing

    S.

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  22. WOWWW!! Honest and awesome!!
    It takes courage to ask for such a punishment too, you know...
    Really, this was an absolutely fantastic take on the theme, Dasun!! I cannot tell you much I loved reading and rereading this one!!
    And the fonts you have chosen for the poem - that too is kinda perfect for the feeling you are trying to express here... really too good!!

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  23. thanks for linking up with potluck.

    http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/11/16/moods-are-like-dark-woods-4-potluck-week-10/

    award/treats for you. smiles.

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  24. http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/11/17/thursday-poets-rally-week-33-november-18-24/


    Welcome attending poets rally week 33, link in a poem, visit 18 poets, done,
    Poetry awards assigned upon completion.
    Happy Friday!
    Thanks in advance for the attention!
    xxx

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  25. http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.wordpress.com/2010/11/20/the-perfect-poet-award-4-poets-rally-week-33/

    week 33 perfect poet award notice,
    Happy Saturday!
    If you wish to accept, attach a poem, enter for week 33..
    you can do it later if too busy.
    Thanks for the support.

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  26. Agony in love is just especially if the person we love doesn't know about it. I have been there too. Well written poem, musical.

    Thank you for dropping by my blog.

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