Awesome my Dear. I would love to sequal this
Wow...much said here and that measure of infatuation with someone...believe most have felt it with someone, somewhere in life...it is agony indeed..bkm
Ooh, this is so full of emotion. The wanting of someone that is just out of reach. Nice.Pamela
you are a very versatile word player- greaT!
There's s lot to be said for things being all in the mind! LOL :)
wow, this is too intense! being in love with a good friend is sweet agony indeed. maybe it's time to tell. ;)Bye For Now
Amazing! Falling in love/lust with a friend is tough! This describes it really well......love it!
I love this .. the last stanza didn't quite flow as well as the others, but this is very creative, even if these old eyes had a hard time reading the font ... still it was a deep and insightful piece, and I know this place!
lovely piece,you hold back, you love, and your mind dance on the blade of sin...brilliant words...a magnificent piece in portraying forbidden love.Thanks for sharing with potluck poetry.Happy Monday.
very identifiable topic to so many and feelings so well described..great write
Wonderfully written. If you get up the courage to confess, write another poem and let us know how it goes:)
A slick write, to give a darkness to what some would wish delight!
Intense and full of passion! What a muse...
I wrote a comment and it was deleted by accident...Long story shortI dig your words...I've said it so many times...and I will keep saying it.Man, I love this!You perform?
great poem on desire. good use of language. nice job!
Almost brought me to tears, especially the second-to-last stanza. It's the casual touches which mean nothing to one and everything to the other that's heartbreaking.
I liked this so much.. thanks for sharing...ॐ नमः शिवायOm Namah ShivayaTwitter: @VerseEveryDayBlog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com
I love how you have expressed ones secret desires of a friend.Anita.
What a rhythmic composition.. I almost sang it to myself.. This can very well be converted to a song with the same words.. The power of this composition filled me up.. :)Love xx
Very powerful, and sensual! Wow!
Simply phrased and nicely summed up; a contorted pleasure/pain is so hard to resist...Enjoyed it very much.
Great work... Thanks for sharing S.
WOWWW!! Honest and awesome!! It takes courage to ask for such a punishment too, you know... Really, this was an absolutely fantastic take on the theme, Dasun!! I cannot tell you much I loved reading and rereading this one!! And the fonts you have chosen for the poem - that too is kinda perfect for the feeling you are trying to express here... really too good!!
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Agony in love is just especially if the person we love doesn't know about it. I have been there too. Well written poem, musical.Thank you for dropping by my blog.