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Thursday, October 7, 2010

Maybe...





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34 comments:

  1. OMG Das did I See The Sound in this piece
    Bravo my Dear.

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  2. Very creative and imaginative.. and I loved the words.. thanks

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
    Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com

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  3. You need to perform your work. That poem just made me smile. I think it'd do that for an audience as well. It's really just passionate, great work. Brava to you!

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  4. I agree with Climb2Nowhere...Do you perform your work?

    I love the introspection and self analaysis in this poem. We think and think and think and it never sounds, reads, looks as beautful as what you have created!

    Write on brotherman!

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  5. wow,
    you truly impress me,
    creative work here..

    everyone calculate everything, but we turn big issues into small manners, turn small manners into nothing that really matters...that's how we live, love, and laugh....

    love your reflections.
    divine work in art and poetry.

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  6. thanks for the unbeatable contribution...
    visit as many poets as possible,
    your poetry deserves everyone's attention!

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  7. it is the mindset that chose to remain faithful to its own kind and there is nothing wrong with that but i know you are intellectually restrained enough not to prevent others from being attracted to what they see and feel.. nice poem!

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  8. WoW!!Love the flow!!Yes do you perform your work??
    Bravo!

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  9. I really love this and the presentation is perfect!
    Pamela

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  10. Superb reflection on duality. The words and structure of the poem are amazing. I've got to nominate this one.
    Victoria

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  11. Clever, profound, beautifully presented. I wish I could have done that.

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  12. You wrapped an interracial relationship into a very tight package that covers so much. I love it. Thanks.

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  13. I like how you question your own perception and partiality in this poem. Maybe that's all their is to love after all, and all there needs to be..

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  14. Outstanding piece, 3 things come to mind, one you pointed out the obvious superficial nature of people who lack the ability to see past hue. Two your method of delivery with the opposing sides white and black that was brillant and three perfect title "Maybe" This poem is an award winner in my book.

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  15. First, it's creative, original, and just perfect the way you've cascaded the poem with stanzas along side one another on white and black columns. Enhances the message. Wonderful.

    Second: I enjoyed the cadence of the poem as it addresses mental/emtional dualities, contradictions. Very fine. Very honest.

    Well done ...

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  16. I loved the thought process included in the poem with the repetition of the word "maybe"... And also the layout lol.

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  17. Das,
    What Intricacy with words.. the project, even better..!!
    We all are full of contradictions and yet scared to acknowledge those; much less agree with.. And that too- we are scared.. Just leading our lives in monotonous manner.. breathing and sulking..

    Well Done- very artistic..
    xox

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  18. WOW. I don't say WOW often. But here. WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW. I absolutely loved this write. Love and Light, Sender

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  19. a very interesting way of writing. the split between our light side and dark side clearly shown- thats how it seemed to me.

    trisha
    http://mydomainpvt.wordpress.com

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  20. That is a very good pair of musings that you've got on you. I have the same musings and also I muse in terms of fantasy. Wanna see my site? It's at http://thelunaticsdiary.blogspot.com

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  21. Very Creative and well written. I enjoy the comparisons of black and white and interracial relationship along with the background color of black and white. Why can't we all be color blind? Well done in writing this great piece.

    http://mangoesntangoes.wordpress.com/

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  22. We are too complex not to look for the grey that exists between the black and white rules we set ourselves in life. Nothing exists without a struggle.

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  23. http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.wordpress.com/2010/10/09/mountains-are-high/

    take the awards after you are done,

    for Poets Rally, 3 poems can be submitted....

    also, vote your favorite poets after you finish your initial 18 commenting....

    Thanks a lot!
    have fun!

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  24. Tough poem.....has a distinctive rhythm...and deliverance.

    Mindful, too.

    Lady Nyo

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  25. very fabulous acceptance...
    loved the Haiku and nominations...
    Way to go.
    perfect post from a perfect poet.
    Cheers!

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  26. I just like to take a moment and THANK all of those who took the time to stop by and check this piece out...also special thanks to Jingle one of the most kindest poets to ever grace the net...

    ...and to answer questions of performing poetry...I did a few years back...I'm considering getting back on the stage sometime soon...(^_^)

    ...THANKS again for stopping by fellow bloggers...ONE::

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  27. sorry it took me so stinking long to get over here. I really really like this, the writing style is fabulous and the content was engaging. I love poems where the writer questions their own thoughts this was grand!

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  28. This is so stylized and lyrical with a message that is dynamite -- I think it would be amazing performed live.

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  29. http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/awards-from-the-blogging-universe/the-sunshine-award-plus-more/

    awards for you.
    have fun today, support our potluck by linking one poem today...
    Happy Tuesday!

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  30. lovely..
    see me on http://loveamongotherthings.wordpress.com/2010/10/12/the-rescuer

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  31. If time is used on obsessing about the way other people live... Is it not lost toward the bettering of our own lives? Peace be with your heart.

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  32. Very creative blog.
    Superb poetry.
    Enjoyed a lot.
    Have a nice day

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  33. Your Poem Maybe,
    Made me smile. Thank you

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