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Sunday, October 24, 2010

Naked Illusions





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21 comments:

  1. undresses her soul ad the feet of his pain...

    very apt words here.
    life in reality is beyond one's expectations.
    you leave me speechless.
    so well done craft.

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  2. Thanks for the contribution,
    Happy Rally.

    do let me know after you are done...
    I lost count since there are so many poets. I appreciate your kindness.
    Cheers!

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  3. That was sensual with some great lines. A very well written piece with alot of emotion and direction. Great work...loved it.

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  4. Thanks for reading my rally entry--I'm glad both the pain and the need to dance came through to you! I enjoyed your entry as well, particularly the use of "bark." It would be so easy to just say "skin" and know the toughness of it is implied, but "bark" is so much stronger. Nice word choice there.

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  5. Beautiful contribution--emotional piece with a good flow. Articulated feelings, from the very beginning: "she undresses her soul at the feet of his pain" Beautiful stuff.

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  6. I liked the last of the poem, very descriptive and beautiful.

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  7. How sensual!
    Ur so good with words
    It really paints a picture.

    A sexy picture!

    x

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  8. I love the flow of this Dasuntoucha, it is beautifully layered...

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  9. this was gorgeous, in meaning and structure

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  10. Beautiful, so lovely :)

    www.mycameraslens.blogspot.com

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  11. Your writing is soulful, sensual, moving and heart-wrenching! Another beautiful piece.

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  12. This is absolutely beautiful. I especially love the first verse.

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  13. what a sensitive poem... !
    it finds echoes in my own soul and psyche...

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  14. http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.wordpress.com/2010/10/27/the-celebrate-poet-of-september-award-nomination-announcement/

    how are you?
    please vote when you have a moment,

    you are nominated, automatically, u win 1 vote,
    when you vote for other poets, u win another vote for yourself,

    thanks for the attention.

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  15. Wow! That was really, really good. You used so many different metaphors. It was a nice read

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  16. "A trilateral rendition of time, distance and truth.."..... "Hues of what is and what is yet to be.." .. Gentle and lovely poem!

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  17. Some lovely metaphors here. Thanks for sharing!
    http://shawnbird.com/category/pondering/poetry/

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  18. Sensual and delicate, yet with strong words that emphasize meaning. Loved it!

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  19. Kudos. Well done and as delicate as its subject. A delightful experience to visit your blog.

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  20. Loved reading this, it has a great flow to it. Like the tributary and meander images.
    Only just found your comment on mine as it went into my spam box!!

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  21. from first lines to last, i feel transported into your lushly lyrical landscape, a willing voyeur to a resonant connection... "causing him to wrap his life around the gift of her essence"

    your final destination may be distant and unknown, but your depiction makes the journey seem well worth the ride.

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