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Sunday, October 24, 2010

Naked Illusions





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Posted by Dasuntoucha at 11:30 AM
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20 comments:

  1. JingleOctober 24, 2010 at 12:02 PM

    undresses her soul ad the feet of his pain...

    very apt words here.
    life in reality is beyond one's expectations.
    you leave me speechless.
    so well done craft.

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  2. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallOctober 24, 2010 at 12:03 PM

    Thanks for the contribution,
    Happy Rally.

    do let me know after you are done...
    I lost count since there are so many poets. I appreciate your kindness.
    Cheers!

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  3. HerotomostOctober 24, 2010 at 5:21 PM

    That was sensual with some great lines. A very well written piece with alot of emotion and direction. Great work...loved it.

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  4. AnonymousOctober 24, 2010 at 5:39 PM

    Thanks for reading my rally entry--I'm glad both the pain and the need to dance came through to you! I enjoyed your entry as well, particularly the use of "bark." It would be so easy to just say "skin" and know the toughness of it is implied, but "bark" is so much stronger. Nice word choice there.

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  5. AnonymousOctober 24, 2010 at 8:18 PM

    Beautiful contribution--emotional piece with a good flow. Articulated feelings, from the very beginning: "she undresses her soul at the feet of his pain" Beautiful stuff.

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  6. Gigi AnnOctober 25, 2010 at 6:55 AM

    I liked the last of the poem, very descriptive and beautiful.

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  7. R.ParisOctober 25, 2010 at 12:40 PM

    How sensual!
    Ur so good with words
    It really paints a picture.

    A sexy picture!

    x

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  8. AnonymousOctober 25, 2010 at 2:20 PM

    I love the flow of this Dasuntoucha, it is beautifully layered...

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  9. AnonymousOctober 25, 2010 at 3:58 PM

    this was gorgeous, in meaning and structure

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  10. Through The LensOctober 26, 2010 at 8:00 AM

    Beautiful, so lovely :)

    www.mycameraslens.blogspot.com

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  11. Climb2NowhereOctober 26, 2010 at 4:37 PM

    Your writing is soulful, sensual, moving and heart-wrenching! Another beautiful piece.

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  12. SuziCateOctober 26, 2010 at 7:37 PM

    This is absolutely beautiful. I especially love the first verse.

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  13. UnknownOctober 27, 2010 at 5:11 AM

    what a sensitive poem... !
    it finds echoes in my own soul and psyche...

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  14. AnonymousOctober 28, 2010 at 5:40 AM

    Wow! That was really, really good. You used so many different metaphors. It was a nice read

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  15. AnonymousOctober 28, 2010 at 12:09 PM

    "A trilateral rendition of time, distance and truth.."..... "Hues of what is and what is yet to be.." .. Gentle and lovely poem!

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  16. AnonymousOctober 28, 2010 at 11:12 PM

    Some lovely metaphors here. Thanks for sharing!
    http://shawnbird.com/category/pondering/poetry/

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  17. UnknownOctober 29, 2010 at 3:21 PM

    Sensual and delicate, yet with strong words that emphasize meaning. Loved it!

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  18. JamieDedesNovember 7, 2010 at 7:58 AM

    Kudos. Well done and as delicate as its subject. A delightful experience to visit your blog.

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  19. AnonymousNovember 9, 2010 at 12:41 AM

    Loved reading this, it has a great flow to it. Like the tributary and meander images.
    Only just found your comment on mine as it went into my spam box!!

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  20. Journey by FireDecember 23, 2010 at 3:19 PM

    from first lines to last, i feel transported into your lushly lyrical landscape, a willing voyeur to a resonant connection... "causing him to wrap his life around the gift of her essence"

    your final destination may be distant and unknown, but your depiction makes the journey seem well worth the ride.

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