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Sunday, September 12, 2010

Grammatical Intentions


Can
eye rub
my fingers
through your lines
and give them
a soft enough
caress so that
dangling participles
and throbbing
metaphors
rush to get undressed?

Can
eye 
embrace
every curve
of every word
giving your phonics
goosebumps while
making the peaks
of your prepositions
stand at attention?

I
confess
you make
me want to
create our own
private dialect
decipherable
by desire
as imagination dives deep
into your pages
of fire

lapping
verbs and
thrusting so hard
into allusions
the allegories crack
as you spread
syllables
and orchestrate
a litany of onomatopoeia
for a
plausible conjunction
with my
diction...

 
 
© 2010 dasuntoucha

22 comments:

  1. This is a wonderful poem. You have found a way to make grammar so very sensual!

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  2. Whoa! THAT is extremely clever!Wonderful!

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  3. why, yes you can!

    cheers to your hyberbolic hypnosis...

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  4. Your poem is amazingly creative and fun to read! You had such fun with the English language!

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  5. Wow! This was so beautifully crafted and original... LOVED it!

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  6. love your work,
    elegant flow.
    very beautifully constructed.

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  7. Words are the power you give to them. You have proven you do not need to be explicit to communicate the cause, to reach the culmination of effect.

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  8. Perfect write here. You should be very proud. Love and Light, Sender

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  9. English grammer has suddenly become very sensuous and loaded with emotion.
    A very fresh idea, which works so well.....

    Best wishes,
    Eileen

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  10. This is so sexy (like Eileen said, right above me) and visual while being so utterly emotional...

    Man, this is masterful. I'd submit this one and give it a wider viewing!

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  11. Beautiful poem in a beautiful blog...nice one.

    Cheers!

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  12. Unbelievably creative and sexy. Love it!

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  13. I felt like an old lady getting a peek at something naughty. What am I saying? I am an old lady! Getting a peek at a wonderfully sensuous and playful game of words. Hat's off to you,

    Elizabeth

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  14. That's just a brilliant use of words! I love how the poem started out gently and built up to a climactic finish. It's wonderful to see such originality.

    I have been placed into a group with you on Poets United, and will come back to visit soon...:)

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  15. simply brilliant! i kept laughing through the poem, wondering whether it really meant what it was meaning... read through again and decided, yes, it means what it seems to mean... and a third read to really enjoy the flavour of what was meant! :) :)

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  16. :) so loved it! extremely sensual and very funny! if only grammar/language were taught like this!

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  17. This is wonderful; I love the way you almost go there and then leave with grammar! Love it~
    Really clever of you ;-D

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  18. ohhhh yesssssssss :)) especially your diction...

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